Working+Thesis

The transition into becoming a professional athletlete is very difficult and is impacted by multiple factors.

Finalized: Going from amateur to professional athlete is a very tough transition in which many people may feel an athlete is ready to go to the next level, however many of them fail when they are faced with the physical/emotional obstacles of professional sports.

Better, but continue to work with the wording. As is, it is a bit too wordy. Try to make it more precise.